Document: draft-ietf-raw-architecture Title: Reliable and Available Wireless Architecture Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya Review result: Ready with Issues I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-raw-architecture-25 Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya Review Date: 2025-06-24 IETF LC End Date: 2025-06-24 IESG Telechat date: 2025-07-10 Summary: This draft reliable and available wireless architecture in the context of deterministic networking or DetNet, i.e. the draft complements DetNet for wireless. Overall, it is a good document, involving huge amount of work, especially I liked Section 3.1.1.1 3rd and 4th paragraphs explaining wireless single point of failure. However it has a number of typos and issues. Major issues:N/A Minor issues: It seems like on DetNet there is currently ongoing research and development involving TSN in IEEE 802.1 and IETF. I suggest that the document makes it clear that Sections 4 and 5 describe roughly a design which needs to be implemented together with TSN as part of link layer. Nits/editorial comments: Issues: Many typos: Sec. 2 controled -> controlled 2.1.6 massage & 2.1.6 massaged -> message 3.2 recieve -> receive The assumption us -> is Along a alternative paths -> along alternative paths 5.1 fucntion -> function Please check, possibly reword: 3.1.1.1 2nd par. Through the games of encapsulation 3.2 OODA list Point 2 may also generate knowledge and wisdom such as a trained model for link quality prediction On Fig. 6 is there or not tunneling on strict RAW over Detnet? 5.1 SD-WAN MPLS-TP undefined -- last-call mailing list -- last-call@xxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to last-call-leave@xxxxxxxx
